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Essay: Veggie vs. Omni 
17th-Oct-2010 04:27 pm

I need a bit of help.  I'm writing a persuasive essay on whether a vegetarian diet is just as healthy as a nonvegetarian diet.  So far, everything i've got indicates that it's healthier, but i'm having issues believing half of it. So some verification would be nice. I don't want to turn in a bunch of false information.

And secondly, i need one last topic. I've got diseases linked to nonvegetarian diets down, and then the one that says we don't even need the meat in our diets. But i need another one and i'm having issues with it, because it's not supposed to be about saving thousands of lives (even though i might just put that anyway) it's about health benefits and diseases. 

Any help at all would be great. :))


Vegetarian Diets vs. Nonvegetarian Diets

 People are constantly wondering if a vegetarian diet is just as healthy as a diet that includes animal product. The answer is yes.  In fact, humans could go their whole life without eating meat and still not be deficient in their nutrients.  As long as a person keeps a balanced diet of fruits, vegetables, and grains, they could end up healthier than the more common omnivorous person.  In fact, vegetarians usually live longer than nonvegetarians.  It's not that hard to figure out why. Did you know that there's more bacteria on a piece of store bought chicken than a toilet seat?

A person who eats meat has a fifty percent higher chance of having a heart attack.  This is because of the high fat and cholesteral levels in meat.  A recent study shows that men between the ages of 45 and 64 who ate meat daily were three times more likely to die from heart disease than vegetarians.  A Japanese scientist also found that non-vegetarian food is linked in raising the anger, anxiety, restlessness, hastiness, and criminal mentality.  These studies also show that the consuption of nonvegetarian food is the cause of 159 different diseases, including  high blood pressure, kidney problem, gall bladder problems, wounds in arteries, eczema, paralysis, tuberculosis, arthritis, and hysteria.  It seems that the human race would benifit from not eating meat, or not eating as much of it. 

For instance, in some ancient civilizations, like ancient Egypt, China, and Mexico, meat was scarce, so they went without it.   Their diets were based solely off of wheat, rice, beans and corn, which are adequate sources of protein and other essencial nutrients.  When a person takes in calories from a variety of different foods, there’s no need to worry about protein and iron deficiencies.


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18th-Oct-2010 12:24 am (UTC)
You have no idea how much help that was. :) I heard about the overuses but never thought to use it in my essay.
17th-Oct-2010 10:00 pm (UTC)
In fact, vegetarians usually live longer than nonvegetarians. It's not that hard to figure out why. Did you know that there's more bacteria on a piece of store bought chicken than a toilet seat?

I'm really not sure what point you're trying to make here. You seem to be making a nutritional point, then veer off into food safety. Also, the assumption that meat is less safe than non-meat is a bit iffy, given that there are plenty of vegetarian sources of food poisoning.

You haven't cited any sources anywhere. I assume you're going to fix that, but citing your sources while you're writing will help you to not lose them.

A Japanese scientist also found that non-vegetarian food is linked in raising the anger, anxiety, restlessness, hastiness, and criminal mentality.

Really? Cite please, and some other studies to back it up.

For instance, in some ancient civilizations, like ancient Egypt, China, and Mexico, meat was scarce, so they went without it.

a) Not entirely so, most ate meat when they could get it (that just wasn't all that often), and b) none of these cultures were exactly well known for being well-nourished and healthy in the general case. Even Egyptian kings found buried in high ceremony in pyramids suffered from nutritional deficiencies. If you're making claims regarding health on a society-wide basis, I'd steer away from using obligatory mostly-vegetarian societies.

Basically, the argument you're making is valid, but you're using a lot of hyperbole, misconception and other problematic argumentative devices to make it. I'd reframe using examples you can prove, basically.
17th-Oct-2010 10:52 pm (UTC)
I'm just curious, how old are you? You're making good points, but your writing skills lack slightly, you've got some odd grammar and your sentences don't really flow.

... Also, since when is eating meat directly tied to paralysis?
18th-Oct-2010 10:31 pm (UTC)
16 :/ I've been writing nonstop for three years but it's nearly impossible for me to write decent essays.

It's not directly tied, I should've put "linked" instead of "causes" because it does not cause paralysis, it's just linked to it on some level.
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18th-Oct-2010 02:29 am (UTC)

Here are some articles and information that might help guide you to arguments in your essay.

There are also other links lower down to other sites.

Good luck.
18th-Oct-2010 10:33 pm (UTC)
Thank you! :)
18th-Oct-2010 03:03 am (UTC)
Sadly both diets can be super good and super bad. Its not just a matter that "meat" is in it and its totally unhealthy or healthy.... or that "its only a vegetable so its healthy or unhealthy".

But a matter of total food selections made that make it healthy. A dinner can be great and then you toss in the German chocolate food cake you ate all by yourself not giving a single slice to another person.... and the diet is down the drain :)

You got to consider the preservatives and additives companies add to food from meats, veggies, and anything you can think of.

And not all vegans pay attention to what is used in base ingredients. Cream of potatoes soup from a res truant? totally vegan? not always.... consider the meat stock used in the stock...

18th-Oct-2010 10:11 pm (UTC)
See that's exactly what i've been having issues with because i'm finding good and bad things in both diets. We're supposed to pick one side, (veggie or omni) and persuade the reader to agree with it. I saw that i got carried away and i'm pretty much starting over. It's too biased.
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18th-Oct-2010 10:35 pm (UTC)
That's actually a really good idea. I feel like i'm changing my paper up a bit, but i don't have a problem with that.
18th-Oct-2010 03:36 am (UTC)
I think you will like this: http://www.circleoflife.org/education/sustainable/organic/how_to_win_arg_meat_eater.pdf

Also, I have some essays I've written on this topic. I wouldn't want you to turn them in or cheat... please don't do that... but I would be willing to send them to you to read and check out the sources I listed and how the essays are set up. If you are interested E-mail me: toxicglamor@aol.com
18th-Oct-2010 12:25 pm (UTC)
I think the essay comes across as extremely biased towards veg diets, and I am not sure that is your intention.

Remember that correlation does not equal causation - this is especially true of the studies that link vegetarian diets to anxiety, anger, etc. and the ones that link it to long life. Remember that the kind of person who goes veg*n is likely to be the kind of person to care about what they eat and do other things to improve their health. Also remember that historical diets are often linked with healthy traditional lifestyles. Google Scholar would be a helpful tool, and make sure you read all the articles fully.

To be honest, the way this is written I am skeptical of almost all the claims you make.
18th-Oct-2010 10:50 pm (UTC)
You're right, it is biased and that is not my intention. I got a little carried away and i realize that now. That problem will be fixed.

That is exactly why i posted it here, because of course i'm going to believe everything in it since i wrote it. I figured since you all know more than i do on the subject then you could tell me if it's believable or not. That problem will be fixed as well.

Thank you for your input. :)
18th-Oct-2010 08:03 pm (UTC)
I agree with the others; this essay is completely biased, and poorly written. Is this a health class? If not, I think you should sort of change the argument to maybe why a vegetarian diet is better for the Earth, or something along those lines. Or maybe vegetarian diets versus diets with red meat, as poultry isn't all that fatty, and I don't believe it's linked to heart problems. Maybe just write this from a humane point of view, and use lots of scare tactics about slaughter houses. You can eat meat, and be perfectly healthy, and vice versa. In fact, my health declined when I first went vegetarian [damn 4-cheese pizzas]. Keep working on it, and don't get discouraged. Oh, and spell check before turning this in please.
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